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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 09. 17 조회 12460

Lazy Mr. Won

작성자: 119846 담당 튜터: Joselin1
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
When I transfered to this department, I met Mr. Won.
Age of 50, small height, monkey mouth. Yes, He is my coworker, but my senior.
After my transfer, I got a lot of work to do. Mr.Won devided the works with me, because he is senior.
I worked late at night everyday, but he go home at the right time.
All the things he is interesting, is the going home time.
When the time near to 5 o'clock, he starts to see his smart phone.
Oneday, I asked him, If you have a lot of work to do, what would you do?
He said, I think I don't have to work even past the going home time. I just go to the boss, and tell him to hire more people.
With his respect, I work late everyday. I want to go home at the right time. But I can't.
Because I don't want to be the people who waste their time and have no vocation on their job.
If I also wait the time to go home like Mr.Won left the works behind, there will be another victim.
튜터 교정 답변

When I transfered to this department, I met Mr. Won. Age of 50, small height, monkey mouth. Yes, He is my coworker, but my senior. After my transfer, I got a lot of work to do. Mr.Won devided the works with me, because he is senior. I worked late at night everyday, but he go home at the right time. All the things he is interesting, is the going home time. When the time near to 5 o'clock, he starts to see his smart phone. Oneday, I asked him, If you have a lot of work to do, what would you do? He said, I think I don't have to work even past the going home time. I just go to the boss, and tell him to hire more people. With his respect, I work late everyday. I want to go home at the right time. But I can't. Because I don't want to be the people who waste their time and have no vocation on their job. If I also wait the time to go home like Mr.Won left the works behind, there will be another victim.

When I transferred to this department, I met Mr. Won. He's 50, short and has a monkey mouth. He is my co-worker but also my senior. After being transferred, I had a lot of work to do. Mr. Won divided the work with me because he is my senior. I worked late everyday but he got to go home on time. When 5 o'clock nears, he starts looking at his phone. One day, I asked him, "If you had a lot of work to do, what would you do?" He said, " I don't think I should have to work overtime so I would just go to the boss and tell him to hire more people." Out of respect for him, I work late everyday. I want to go home at the right time but I can't because I don't want to be one of the people who waste time on their job and get no vacation. Also, if I didn't do the work left behind by Mr. Won and went home on time, there would just be another victim.

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