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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 09. 23 조회 12822

Friends get together

작성자: 119846 담당 튜터: Joselin1
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Today, Colleagues of university are get together. At the start of this year, I made a connection by using a SNS. At the first time, the reaction from the old friends was great. Becuase everyone was anxious to hear friends news. I gethered the old contact from my old mailbox, and send a mail to friends to join a SNS. Most of the contacts was valid, and many of them send a message back to me.
Anyway we had get together two times already, and today is the third. Feedbacks for join the party was less than the first get together but I expect over 10 would be participated in. I arranged korean style babeque restaurant placed in Sa-Dang. The restaurant is the same as the place we made the first get together. We'll meet at 7 pm. Now it's 1 pm, but I can't wait until 7 alreay.
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Today, Colleagues of university are get together. At the start of this year, I made a connection by using a SNS. At the first time, the reaction from the old friends was great. Becuase everyone was anxious to hear friends news. I gethered the old contact from my old mailbox, and send a mail to friends to join a SNS. Most of the contacts was valid, and many of them send a message back to me. Anyway we had get together two times already, and today is the third. Feedbacks for join the party was less than the first get together but I expect over 10 would be participated in. I arranged korean style babeque restaurant placed in Sa-Dang. The restaurant is the same as the place we made the first get together. We'll meet at 7 pm. Now it's 1 pm, but I can't wait until 7 alreay.

Today, I'm getting together with old college friends. At the start of the year, I contacted them via SNS. The response was great because everyone was anxious to hear about eachother. I gathered all my old contacts from my mailbox and sent a mail out asking them to join an SNS group. Most of my old contacts were valid and many of them messaged back. Anyway, we've gotten together twice already and today will be the third time. Feedback to join the party was less than the first time but I expect over 10 people will participate. I've arranged to meet at a Korean style barbeque place in Sa-Dang. Its the same place where we had our first get together. We are meeting at 7pm. Its 1pm now and I can't wait!

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