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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 04. 16 조회 13185

I live with parents

작성자: pos471724 담당 튜터: Riza
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I agree that I live with parents for the following reasons

The first reason is I can save money because I don't need to pay expense of house, food, utilitys and also I can reduce waste of time such as cooking, washing clothes.

The second reason is I can have a lot of refresh time because I divide the housework,
so I will have more free time to enjoy my life

next reason is I can get emotional stability when i am sick, i can get help from parent quickly
The final reason is I can get some exprience and a lot of information from them, so i can share
with knowlege all family and we can more communicate with them each other
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I agree that I live with parents for the following reasons

>> I want to live with my parents for the following reasons:

 

The first reason is I can save money because I don't need to pay expense of house, food, utilitys and also I can reduce waste of time such as cooking, washing clothes.

>> First reason, I can save money because I don't need to pay for house, food and utility services, I can also save time by not cooking and not washing clothes.

The second reason is I can have a lot of refresh time because I divide the housework, so I will have more free time to enjoy my life next reason is I can get emotional stability when i am sick, i can get help from parent quickly

>> Second reason is I can have a lot of  relaxing time because I divide the housework, I also have a lot of free time. Next reason is I can easily  get  help and emotional stability when I am sick from my parents.

The final reason is I can get some exprience and a lot of information from them, so i can share with knowlege all family and we can more communicate with them each other

>> the final reason is, I can get more experience and more information from them whick I can share it with my family. and lastly we can communicate with each other.

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