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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 04. 16 조회 12868

about travel

작성자: 1100048737 담당 튜터: Beth
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I din't like to travel a few years ago. Someday, my wife asked me to travel anywhere by airplane. In my mind, I wanted to say like "If we go to travel by airplane, we will ran out of budget of this month. I think it's the best to let sleeping dogs lie" but I count't say that because it definitely would disappoint my wife. I had a idea. I thout Jeju island is the best place to travel with low cost. So I asked her "When is the best time to travel to Jeju island" She said "Right now",

After coming back home from Jeju island, I changed my mind. I felt that I would love again stronger than before
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I din't like to travel a few years ago.

-> I didn't like to travel few years ago.

Someday, my wife asked me to travel anywhere by airplane.

-> One day, my wife asked me to travel somewhere by airplane/plane.

In my mind, I wanted to say like "If we go to travel by airplane, we will ran out of budget of this month.

-> In my mind, I wanted to say like that if we go to travel by airplane, we will ran run out of budget of this month.

I think it's the best to let sleeping dogs lie" but I count't say that because it definitely would disappoint my wife.

->But I couldn't say it because it would definitely disappoint my wife. I thought it was best to let sleeping dogs lie.

I had a idea. I thout Jeju island is the best place to travel with low cost.

-> I had an idea, I thought Jeju Island was the best place to travel at low cost.

So I asked her "When is the best time to travel to Jeju island" She said "Right now",

-> So I asked her when's the best time to travel to Jeju Island, and she said "Right now."

After coming back home from Jeju island, I changed my mind. I felt that I would love again stronger than before

->After coming back from Jeju Island, I changed my mind about travelling and I fell in love again and it was stronger than before.

 

Good day Paul,

It amuses me to know how you tried your best to please your wife. How your experience made you love her more and also how it changed your view about travelling. I liked it best when you used the expression, Let sleeping dogs lie. It was perfect. Keep it up.

Thank you for sharing. Have a great day and I'll call you in class.

 

-Beth-  ^-^

 

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