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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 10. 02 조회 13831

Introduction family

작성자: HLCC200010815 담당 튜터: Douglas2
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I have been married since 2000.
My wife is same age to me.
We met 7 years before marriage.
A friend of mine had me meet her at that time.
Both of us were college students.
After graduation, she was hired for a wedding planner.
Since every Korean men over 20 years must go military services, I had to be there for 3 years as well.
After one year wedding, she came to be pregnant and gave a birth for daughter.
My daughter is so lovely and smart one.
She is 15 years old and middle school student.
She loves math and playing violin.
She is good at skiing and playing tennis as well.
Three of us used to go to the gym together to maintain health three times a week in the evening.
On vacation, we love going family trip. So we used to go together everywhere to drive in the country.
튜터 교정 답변

I have been married since 2000.  My wife is the same age as I am.  We met 7 years before we got married, when a friend of mine introduced us in college.  After graduation, she was hired as a wedding planner. Since all Korean men over 20 must serve in the military, I had to serve for 3 years.  One year after our wedding, my wife became pregnant and gave birth to our daughter, who came to be so lovely and smart.  She is now 15 years old and a middle school student.  She loves math and violin, and is also good at skiing and tennis.  The three of us used to go to the gym together to maintain our health three times a week in the evening. We love going on family trips for vacation, and we used to drive all around the country together.

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