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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 10. 02 조회 14077

Reading newspaper1

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The reason I'm trying to keep reading newspapers is various. These days I read a newspaper about economy such as Financial Times or Wall Street journal. These kinds of newspaper gives me a lot of economy knoweldge and alive economic information, so that I can expand my views about economy and get a rather deeper understanding of the things which are currentrly happening around me. For instance, a couple of months ago, I read a news about PEF that is personal equity funds so I could understand what the PEF is and I was able to find where my money can be invested. Even though I didn't invest though.

I like to read paper newspaper rather than the online news. Becasue, the paper newspaper provides the the day's news priority and importance. For instance, a news in the first page is more important rather than in the other pages. So that's why I prefer a paper newpaper more.
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The reason I'm trying to keep reading newspapers is various. These days I read a newspaper about economy such as Financial Times or Wall Street journal. These kinds of newspaper gives me a lot of economy knoweldge and alive economic information, so that I can expand my views about economy and get a rather deeper understanding of the things which are currentrly happening around me. For instance, a couple of months ago, I read a news about PEF that is personal equity funds so I could understand what the PEF is and I was able to find where my money can be invested. Even though I didn't invest though. I like to read paper newspaper rather than the online news. Becasue, the paper newspaper provides the the day's news priority and importance. For instance, a news in the first page is more important rather than in the other pages. So that's why I prefer a paper newpaper more.

 

Hi Joowon -- we'll review this together on Monday, as there are several grammatical principles I would like to point out to you first hand. :)

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