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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 10. 05 조회 13258

What is one great contribution that my contry made to the world?

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When any countries suffer a disaster we send doctors, firefighters and volunteers to help people. They went to help China Sichuan earthquake, Nepal earthquake, Indonesia tsunami etc. Also we coutributed for Japan tsunami. The nuclear plant was collapsed by tsunami and it was terrible accident.
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When most countries suffer a natural disaster we most times come to their aid by sending doctors, firefighters and volunteers to help people. Examples of some of Korea's relief effort include the China Sichuan earthquake, Nepal earthquake, Indonesia tsunami etc. We also coutributed relief and aid for the Japan tsunami. The nuclear plant collapsed due to the effect of the tsunami. It was terrible accident. GREAT JOB!

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