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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 10. 05 조회 12228

when do you start a swimming?

작성자: HDP140303 담당 튜터: Madie
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I started a swimming 3 years ago
but last year I began to swimming in earnest
and This may I got a life guard license
And I got a cpr , first aid license, as expert level
As I said you i go to swimming pool every weekend
To practics a rescue swimming and exercise.
And last month I particifated in a swimming compettion in Daegu
It was very awesome experience to me and i will improve My swimming skills
튜터 교정 답변

I started  swimming 3 years ago but last year I began to swimming more seriously .Its becauseI I got a life guard license,  a cpr , and first aid license as expert level As I said  I go to swimming pool every weekend to practice in rescue swimming and exercise. And last month I participated in a swimming compettion in Daegu. It was very awesome experience for me and I promise to improve my swimming skills

 

Please be guided with the corrections that i noted in your script,thank you!

Teacher Madie

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