Shopping
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I'll tell you about my favorite place to shop and my shopping partner.
My favorite place to shop is Gasan Digital Complex area.
There are three big shopping malls those have various fashion goods such as clothing, shoes, hanbags, jewelry, and so on.
Also, They have many luxury brand and have been offering a high discount about 40%.
My shopping partner is my wife.
She and I both like shopping and we go shopping every weekend if we don't have a prior appointment.
But, We don't always buy any goods.
Not only there are many good restaurants and cafes such as starbug, But also there is a movie theater,
So, We go to the shopping center to have a date or spend a time together.
Honestly, we go there more often to spend a time rather then shopping.
That's the end of my story.
My favorite place to shop is Gasan Digital Complex area.
There are three big shopping malls those have various fashion goods such as clothing, shoes, hanbags, jewelry, and so on.
Also, They have many luxury brand and have been offering a high discount about 40%.
My shopping partner is my wife.
She and I both like shopping and we go shopping every weekend if we don't have a prior appointment.
But, We don't always buy any goods.
Not only there are many good restaurants and cafes such as starbug, But also there is a movie theater,
So, We go to the shopping center to have a date or spend a time together.
Honestly, we go there more often to spend a time rather then shopping.
That's the end of my story.
튜터 교정 답변
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I'll tell you about my favorite place to shop and my shopping partner. Jason Digital Complex area is my favorite place to shop. There are three big shopping malls, those have various fashion goods such as clothing, shoes, handbags, jewelry, and so on. Also, They have many luxury brands and have been offering a high discount about 40%. My shopping partner is my wife. She and I both like shopping and we go shopping every weekend if we don't have a prior appointment. But, We don't always buy any goods. Not only there are many good restaurants and cafes such as Starbucks, But also there is a movie theater, So, We go to the shopping center to have a date or spend a time together. Honestly, we go there more often to spend a time rather than shopping. That's the end of my story. |
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