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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 10. 07 조회 12505

community event

작성자: 1101969850 담당 튜터: Ana
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I’d like to talk about community between the past and now
Before, there weren’t many community events. I think at that time, many communities couldn’t get enough financial supports.
But now, you can see many community events with government support and local’s participation. So communities are revitalized and events are one of them.
I think communities are getting more and more wealthy
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I’d like to talk about my community between the past and now. Before, there weren’t many community events. I think at that time, many communities couldn’t get enough financial supports. But now, you can see many community events with government support and local’s participation. So our communities are really eager to join and events are one of them. I think our community is getting more and more wealthy.

Hi Gerald! Thanks for dropping by to send me your thoughts, again be careful on some words though you are almost a good writer. Keep it up! ^_^

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