technology
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Well, I’d like to talk about technology between the past and now
Before, people used to listen to music with these somethings such as audio, mp3 player, DVD player and so on. Of course they used cellphone too.
But it was only for making phone calls.
But now, we have smartphone. As long as you have it, you don’t need many things. Especially at home. It is almighty device and it have many multi-functions such as audio, video, camera, GPS and so on. these days you can also control your home appliances using smartphone.
You and I are living in convenient life these days.
Before, people used to listen to music with these somethings such as audio, mp3 player, DVD player and so on. Of course they used cellphone too.
But it was only for making phone calls.
But now, we have smartphone. As long as you have it, you don’t need many things. Especially at home. It is almighty device and it have many multi-functions such as audio, video, camera, GPS and so on. these days you can also control your home appliances using smartphone.
You and I are living in convenient life these days.
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