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UNIT 12 my answer

작성자: pos589003 담당 튜터: Ivy
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Question 6.

I go to karaoke for several reasons.
First, I think it is a good place to relieve my stress from daily life.
Secondly, I can sing loudly there. Actually I can not sing loudly at home because of my neighbors. So I can enjoy singing at karaoke without any disturbance.
For these reasons I go to karaoke.
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Question 6.

I go to karaoke for several reasons.

First, I think it is a good place to relieve my stress from daily life.

> First, I think it is a good place to relieve my stress from my daily life. 

 

Secondly, I can sing loudly there.

> Second, I can sing loudly in there. 

 

Actually I can not sing loudly at home because of my neighbors.

> Actually, I can not sing loudly at home because of my neighbors. 

 

So I can enjoy singing at karaoke without any disturbance.

> So, I can enjoy singing at karaoke without any disturbance. 

 

For these reasons I go to karaoke.

> For these reasons, I go to karaoke.

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