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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 10. 13 조회 13041

go to sea beach

작성자: 1101969850 담당 튜터: Ana
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I usually go to beach called east sea beach in Korea. It is located near world station
Maybe, it takes about 4 hours from my apartment and I usually go there by my car
There, I can see many things. There are people swimming, jogging, walking the dog, sun turning. Also, there are many tubes, parasol, ships and so on.
It is close to my co-worker’s apartment and it’s the most famous beach in Korea
And Near the beach, there are many facilities such as restaurants, cafes and convenient store. And also you can go there easily because there is a free parking lot
I think the east sea beach is always safe, clean and well-maintained.
So, I’d like to strongly recommend there.
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I usually go to a beach in east sea of Korea. It is located near world station. Maybe, it takes about 4 hours from my apartment and I usually go there by my car There, I can see many things. There are people swimming, jogging, walking with the dog, sun tanning. Also, there are many tubes, parasol, ships and so on. It is close to my co-worker’s apartment and it’s the most famous beach in Korea and near the beach, there are many facilities such as restaurants, cafes and convenient store. And also you can go there easily because there is a free parking lot. I think the east sea beach is always safe, clean and well-maintained. So, I’d like to strongly recommend for the foreigners to go there.

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