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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 10. 14 조회 12690

Letter

작성자: 119220 담당 튜터: Jerry2
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Hi Jerry~~
The following contents is a letter which I sent to my co-worker
Pls, feedback ~~!
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Hi Joe~!

It is more effective to discuss with you through the off-line meeting
than on-line meeting.

But, No Problem~


But I think, before the call meeting, it is better to know about the agenda of the meeting.
Please send me what kind of subject we need to discuss in advance.
And I can prepare some materials for our meeting, if I need it


Thanks

Jongeun.
튜터 교정 답변

Hello Jack, i took a look at the sample letter you sent a co-worker. I didn't pick out any grammar errors or incorrect sentences. However here's an example of how i would have worded the letter, hopefully this helps.

Hello Joe,

I feel it is more effective communicating with you through off-line meetings (messages) rather than on-line (in person) but no worries.
 
I would like to suggest, informing or sending me an agenda and subject matter in advance for any upcoming meetings in the future. As I can prepare pertinent materials regarding. This should save time and I feel is more effective.
 
Thanks, Jongeun
 
Let me know what you think.
- teacher jerry
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