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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 10. 14 조회 12231

Presentation Scenario.

작성자: HLCC200010815 담당 튜터: Douglas2
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Hello, everyone. My name is Peter Park,and I am a senior manager who is in charge of managing overseas affiliates in the planning team.
Welcome to Hanwha Advanced Materials in Korea.
I am sure you guys will have a wonderful time during this period.
I am going to introduce about Hanwha first.
Since its foundation in 1952, Hanwha has done a great role in Korea’s economic growth.
Starting with the commercial explosives business, which was essential for post-war national reconstruction.
We have established key industries through business diversification, strategic acquisitions, and continuous innovation in technology and services.
To become a truly global player, Hanwha has adopted the strategy of selection and concentration to enhance our business structure and expand our presence in the strategic markets.
튜터 교정 답변

Hello, everyone.  My name is Peter Park, and I am a senior manager in charge of overseas affiliates on the planning team.  Welcome to Hanwha Advanced Materials in Korea.  I am sure you guys will have a wonderful time during this period.  I am going to introduce Hanwha first.  Since its founding in 1952, Hanwha has played a major role in Korea’s economic growth, starting with the commercial explosives business, which was essential for post-war national reconstruction.  We have established key industries through business diversification, strategic acquisitions, and continuous innovation in technology and services. To become a truly global player, Hanwha has adopted the strategy of selection and concentration to enhance our business structure and expand our presence in the strategic markets.

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