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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 10. 27 조회 13802

Traveling in the country

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Okay, I will tell you about the most memorable travel site in my country.
I love traveling a lot and sometimes take a trip with my family.

There are many good place to travel in korea such as
a national park, old historical city, beautiful island, and so on.

Among them, my favorite site is the island, expecially jeju island.
There are several reasons why I love there.

First, Jeju island is one of the most popular travel site, so,
there are a lot of things to see and nice hotels.

Second, There is the most high mountain in korea, that is Hanra Mountain.
A snow-capped mountain in the winter is really beautiful.

Finally, my wife like to travel by airplane.
so, I like jeju because we should take an airplane to go to jeju.

When my children was young, We often traveled the whole country.
But, after they have grown up, though we are often unable to travel,
Travel indeed brings my family more happiness.
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Okay, I will tell you about the most memorable travel site in my country. I love traveling a lot and sometimes take a trip with my family.

There are many good places to travel in Korea such as national parks, old historical cities, beautiful islands, and so on.

Among them, my favorite site is the islands, especially Jeju Island. There are several reasons why I love there.

First, Jeju island is one of the most popular travel sites, so, there are a lot of things to see and nice hotels.

Second, there's a highest mountain in Korea, which is the Hanra Mountain. A snow-capped mountain in the winter is really beautiful.

Finally, my wife likes to travel by airplane so I like Jeju because we should take an airplane to go there.

When my children were young, we often traveled the whole country. But, after they have grown up, though we are often unable to travel, Travel has indeed brought my family more happiness.

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