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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 10. 28 조회 13985

Thinking after reporting to the management (2/2)

작성자: pos601974 담당 튜터: Mary1
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
When I look back on reporting of my boss, it is true that he tried so much to deliver what he wanted to say to the vice president as clear as possible with displaying various pictures, graphs, and data.

I get another opportunity to redeem me as showing the vice president how I improved and checked well what I had missed before. I may report the result of contract with the Indonesia branch of our company to the vice president sooner or later.

I remember Michael Jordan, a legendary NBA star player, said he tried not to make same mistakes and repaid everything he owed from the basketball game after his team had lost to the opponent team, and as a result, he got a big success.

As I recall his story, I’ll do my best to prepare well for the upcoming report and double-check what the vice president pointed out on the previous report when I had reported to him.
튜터 교정 답변

When I look back on the reporting of my boss, it is true that he tried so much to deliver what he wanted to say to the vice president as clearly as possible by displaying various pictures, graphs, and data. I get another opportunity to redeem myself by showing the vice president how I improved and checked well what I had missed before. I may report the result of the contract with the Indonesia branch of our company to the vice president sooner or later. I remember Michael Jordan, a legendary NBA star player, said he tried not to make same mistakes and repaid everything he owed from the basketball game after his team had lost to the opponent team, and as a result, he had much success. As I recall his story, I’ll do my best to prepare well for the upcoming report and double-check what the vice president pointed out on the previous report when I had reported to him.

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