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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 11. 01 조회 14031

Introduction myself

작성자: HTPC050010 담당 튜터: Kendra2
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Let me introduce myself.
My name is Kyehwa Jeong. My English name is Monica, my baptismal name.
I work for Hanwha Total as a trading manager. I am handling Gasoline.
I've been working for 10 years. I am satisfied with my job and conditions.
There are 6 people in my family, my husband, 2 kids, and my parents. My parents take care of my kids, as I'm a working mom. I live in Seoul. My hobby is hiking, walking, swimming, reading books, watching movies, performance and concerts and so on. But, I usually spend my time with my kids when I have free time. Recently, I try to study English as I have to take OPiC test in November. I took Opic 3 years ago. My score was IM2. But for this time, I have to get over IH level. That's why I signed up for this class. I expect this class will be very helpful to get better grade for the coming OpiC.
Thank you for paying attention to my instroction.
I look forward to talking with you over the phone Tuesday.
See you then.
튜터 교정 답변

Let me introduce myself. My name is Kyehwa Jeong. My English name is Monica, my baptismal name. I work for Hanwha Total as a trading manager. I am handling Gasoline. I've been working for 10 years. I am satisfied with my job and conditions. There are 6 people in my family, my husband, 2 kids, and my parents. My parents take care of my kids, as I'm a working mom. I live in Seoul. My hobby is hiking, walking, swimming, reading books, watching movies, performance and concerts and so on. But, I usually spend my time with my kids when I have free time. Recently, I try to study English as I have to take OPiC test in November. I took Opic 3 years ago. My score was IM2. But for this time, I have to get over IH level. That's why I signed up for this class. I expect this class will be very helpful to get better grade for the coming OpiC. Thank you for paying attention to my instroction. I look forward to talking with you over the phone Tuesday. See you then.

 

Hi Monica!

 

A pleasure to meet you! You seem to have had plenty of English experiences as your message is very good in details. I see that you want to improve your score result on th OpiC exam. Though this will be a quick month for you since you mentioned that you will have the exam this November, am I right? Hope you can catch up so you can get the IH level. Talk to you tomorrow Monica and have a nice Monday ahead!

 

Teacher Kendra

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