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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 11. 02 조회 13440

Travelng Abroad

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Ok, I tell you about things I bring when I travel abroad.

There are two type of travel for me.

The first is that I travel abroad with my family.

When I travel with them, I make sure to bring a selfie stick, instant cup ramen,
and several casual dress.

To take a photo with my family without the help of others,
a selfie stick is a must-have item.

During the trip, my wife and two sons want to have korean style food,
so I need to prepare for instant cup ramens

The second is that I go on a business trip abroad.

Then, I make sure to bring a business suit, cosmetics,
and dental hygiene products such as tooth brush, tooth paste

When I go on a business trip, I always have a meeting with my customer or business partner.
So, I had better wear a business suit.

Also, I usually stay in the hotel but sometimes there are not dental hygiene products
and cosmetics in hotel.
So I always make sure to bring them.

That's all.
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Ok, I will tell you about the thingsthat I bring when I travel abroad. There are two types of travel for me. The first is that I travel abroad with my family. When I travel with them, I make sure to bring a selfie stick, instant cup ramen, and several casual clothes. To take a photo with my family without the help of others, a selfie stick is a must-have item. During the trip, my wife and two sons want to have a korean style food, so I need to prepare an instant cup ramen. The second is that I go on a business trip abroad. Then, I make sure to bring a business suit, cosmetics, and dental hygiene products such as tooth brush, tooth paste. When I go on a business trip, I always have a meeting with my customer or business partner. So, I need to wear a business suit. Also, I usually stay in the hotel but sometimes there are no dental hygiene products and cosmetics in hotel. So I always make sure to bring them. That's all.

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