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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 11. 03 조회 12947

House

작성자: 70950 담당 튜터: Faith
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OK, I will introduce you to my good house.

I live in an apartment two years ago.

My apartment is a big complex that consists of twenty buildings and has a nice living environment.

My apartment is a 25 story building and my house is on the 20th floor.

My favorite place in the apartment is a fitness center which has many execise machines.

I often go there and work out three or four times a week.

There are three rooms in my house, The biggest room is for my wife and me,
and the rest rooms are for my two sons.

The best place in the house is a living room because there is a space for our family together.

Sometimes, we watch a movie together in the living room on a weekend evening
and we all fall asleep there.

That's the end of my story. Thank you.
튜터 교정 답변

OK, I will describe my good house to you. I live in my current apartment for  two years now. My apartment is a big complex that consists of twenty buildings and has a nice living environment. My apartment is a 25 story building and my house is on the 20th floor. My favorite place in the apartment is the fitness center which has many execise machines. I often go there and work out three or four times a week. There are three rooms in my house, The biggest room is for my wife and me, and the rest of the rooms are for my two sons. The best place in the house is our living room because that space is  good for our family to be together. Sometimes, we watch a movie together in the living room on a weekend evening and we all fall asleep there. That's the end of my story. Thank you.

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