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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 11. 10 조회 12983

My Favorite Song - 1

작성자: 70950 담당 튜터: Faith
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Ok, I tell you about my favorite song.

I have loved singing and playing guitar from middle school.
Then, I went to church with my friends and I was a member of a choir.
We liked singing hymns together.

When I was a high school student, I really loved hard-lock music and lock band.
Especially, I liked three legendary guitarists, they are Eric Clapton,
Jimmy Page and Jeffback.

My favorite song is " Starway to heaven" by Lock band Red jepplin that was
composed of guitarist Jimmy Page and vocalist Robert Plant.
The song begins in a slow tempo, but the final section is an uptempo hardlock
melody and very passionate.
It is very difficult to sing along that song well because It's sound and tone
both are very high.

My second favorite song is "Tears in heaven" by Eric Clapton.
The lyrics are very sad because he wrote the lyrics thining his son's death,
but melody is really beautiful.
Util now, I sometimes sing that song.

That's all.
튜터 교정 답변

Ok, I will tell you about my favorite song. I have loved singing and playing the guitar from middle school. Then, I went to church with my friends and I was a member of a choir. We liked singing hymns together. When I was a high school student, I really loved hard-lock music and lock band. Especially, I liked three legendary guitarists, they are Eric Clapton, Jimmy Page and Jeffback. My favorite song is " Starway to heaven" by Lock band Red jepplin that was composed by a guitarist, Jimmy Page and vocalist Robert Plant. The song begins in a slow tempo, but the final section is an uptempo hardlock melody and very passionate. It is very difficult to sing along that song well because It's sound and tone both are very high. My second favorite song is "Tears in heaven" by Eric Clapton. The lyrics are very sad because he wrote the lyrics thinking of his son's death, but the melody is really beautiful. Util now, I sometimes sing that song. That's all.

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