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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 11. 23 조회 13428

The computerized on-board warning system 2/2

작성자: pos601974 담당 튜터: Mary1
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For instance, if signals from airplane’s transponder are messed up, then the warning system can make a wrong decision the likelihood of a collision. Although the warning system alerts the likelihood of a collision relevantly, sometimes it can provide an airplane with a wrong evasive action if another is approaching to it too fast or is frequently changing the route.

Last, the article ignores a pilot’s response. If many pilots have difficulty to use the warning system because it’s not user friendly or the recommend evasive actions are too complex for pilots to follow, then it is highly possible for the warning system to become useless and not to solve the problem of midair plane collisions.

In conclusion, there are series of assumptions in the article in a daily newspaper. It’s not only because something can be happened in one plane’s warning system, but also because the warning system may not be fitted to pilots.
튜터 교정 답변

For instance, if the signals from the airplane’s transponder are messed up, then the warning system can make a wrong decision about the likelihood of a collision. Although the warning system alerts the likelihood of a collision relevantly, sometimes it can provide an airplane with a wrong evasive action if another is approaching to it too fast or is frequently changing the route. Last, the article ignores a pilot’s response. If many pilots have difficulty using the warning system because it’s not user friendly or the recommended evasive actions are too complex for pilots to follow, then it is highly possible for the warning system to become useless and not to solve the problem of midair plane collisions. In conclusion, there is a series of assumptions in the article in a daily newspaper. It’s not only because something can happen in one plane’s warning system, but also because the warning system may not be fitted to pilots.

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