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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 12. 08 조회 13075

Please check my sentences grammatically (12.2)

작성자: 1102047346 담당 튜터: Kendra1
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My boss wants me to make hair styling.
At first, I dry my hair to make cool shape.
Then I use hair wax and spray to fix the shape.
I prefer short hair, because if my hair is long, it is difficult to make hair style.
I didn't want to show me shaggy.
I wanted to take a little off the top and sides.

I didn't have any interesting about my appearance.

My best freind has a job as a owner.

My parents buy me books or cake and so on as my birthday gift.
I'm in my office when you call me.
When it comes to having a breakfast, I'm a kind of person who can't live without breakfast.


Seoul is the capital of Korea.
I can do many things in my bed room.
When I lay on my bed, I feel relaxed.
Also I can take my mind off work.
It is impossible to imagine my life without the point that I lay on my bed.
My bed room is perfect.
It's more than I can ask for.
But if I can add one more thing, I want to have more spacious bed room.
It would be better than now.
튜터 교정 답변

My boss wants me to style my hair. At first, I dry my hair to make cool shape. Then I use hair wax and spray to fix the shape. I prefer short hair, because if my hair is long, it is difficult to style. I didn't want to have a shaggy look. I wanted to take a little off the top and sides. I didn't have any interests about my appearance. My best friend has a job as an owner. My parents bought me books or cake and so on as my birthday gift. I'm in the office when you call me. When it comes to having breakfast, I'm the kind of person who can't live without breakfast. Seoul is the capital of Korea. I can do many things in my bed room. When I lay on my bed, I feel relaxed. Also I can take my mind off work. It is impossible to imagine my life without the point that I lay on my bed. My bed room is perfect. It's more than I can ask for. But if I can add one more thing, I want to have a more spacious bed room. It would be better than now.

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