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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 12. 08 조회 15516

Please check my sentences gramatically(12.3)

작성자: 1102047346 담당 튜터: Kendra1
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Since you've mentioned it, I vaguely remember that it was when I was in middle school.

E-mail was a convenient way to keep in touch with friends.
Although they lived far from me.
One day, I checked a e-mail sent by friends.
The e-mail had a problem like virus.
As soos as I opened it, my PC was out of order.
Even my hard disc was wiped.
I couldn't imagine that situation before that time.
I felt like I was at the end of the world.
I didn't know what I should do.

I'm not sure that my friend sent me the e mail that had virus.
I think my friend was attacked by hackers.
Hackers would join my friend's ID, and send virus email as my friend.

After that I don't check my e mail by using my PC.

Thanks to advancement of technology, there are millions of anti virus application
I install that programs to protect my PC from virus.

Samsung phone was no stock.

Finishing online game, I regret that I wasted my time.
The interface of the game is complicated for novice.
튜터 교정 답변

Since you've mentioned it, I vaguely remember that it was when I was in middle school. E-mail was a convenient way to keep in touch with friends. Although they lived far from me. One day, I checked an e-mail sent from my friends. The e-mail had a problem, like a virus. As soon as I opened it, my PC was out of order. Even my hard disc was wiped out. I couldn't imagine that situation before that time, I felt like I was at the end of the world. I didn't know what I should do, I'm not sure if my friend sent me the e-mail that had a virus because I think my friend was attacked by hackers. Hackers would join my friend's ID and send virused e-mails pretending to be my friend. After that, I didn't check my e-mail when using my PC. Thanks to the advancement of technology, there's millions of anti-virus application which I installed one of those programs to protect my PC from the virus. Samsung phone has no stock. Finishing online game, I regret that I wasted my time. The interface of the game is complicated for novice.

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