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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 12. 10 조회 13595

When would be the momment that I can see ethreal sky in my life?

작성자: pos581121 담당 튜터: Amanda2
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
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When I look up the word " ethereal" it not easy to make imagination.
Once I chekcked related picture of it, however, it was clear to understand the meaning.
The picture that I found on the internet, was taken by sky, someweher in the earth , covering full of snow and twinkle uncountable stars. That is real ethereal sky.That is The place which I might see in my dreams, but existing in real. It's time to have another bucket list. I will definitely add it going those kind of place. Whenever I see those kind of natural beauty, I realize how my life boundary is small as dust. The earth is so big and wide that I am not able to explore. However, I belive once I have dream, one day it will come ture in my life.
튜터 교정 답변

Great job with the word of the day! You really have a great understanding of the definition! I always love your comments! I've corrected your sentences below in red! See you next class! 

"When I look up the word " ethereal" it is not easy to imagine. Once, I looked up photos related to the word and it made it clearer. The picture that I found on the internet, was of the sky somewehere on earth. The ground was covered in snow and the sky was full of twinkling stars. That is a really ethereal sky. That is the place that I might see in my dreams, but it exists in real life. It's time to add to my bucket list. I will definitely add going to those kinds of places. Whenever I see that kind of natural beauty, I realize how small my existence is. The earth is so big and wide that I am not able to explore all of it. However, I believe once I have a dream about something, it will come true one day!"

Keep up the hard work! 

Amanda

 

 

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