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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 12. 12 조회 13790

Please check my sentences gramatically (12.7)

작성자: 1102047346 담당 튜터: Kendra1
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
We departed on Fri after work, but the high way got packed with tons of cars.
When I entered the office, I have felt better because they turned on heater.

My house has a heater under the floor like other house.
My office has a heater shape of air conditioner.

Internet is a essential thing for our lives.
Internet gives some convenient things.
In the past, we had to use international call if we wanted to contact people who live abroad.
We can use video call, and it is cheap compared to past.

When we try to get information from the internet, sometimes we get uncomfortable.
Even though we don't want to get junk information, we can't avoid it.
We aren't able to know whether information is good or bad before we get it.
Nowadays, because of SNS, we get news from someone who we don't want to keep in touch with.

Internet has advantages more than downside.
Internet has already changed our lives.
I'm curious about how internet would change our lives more and more.
튜터 교정 답변

We departed on Friday going to work but the high-way got packed with tons of cars. When I entered the office, I have felt better because they turned on the heater. My house has a heater under the floor like other houses but my office has a heater like a shape of an air conditioner. The internet is an essential thing for our lives. Internet gives some convenient things. In the past, we had to use international calls if we wanted to contact people who live abroad. We can now use video calls, and it is cheap compared to the past. When we try to get information from the internet, sometimes we get uncomfortable. Even though we don't want to get junk information, we can't avoid it. We aren't able to know whether the information is good or bad before we get it. Nowadays, because of SNS, we get news from someone who we don't want to keep in touch with. Internet has advantages more than the downside. The internet has already changed our lives. I'm curious about how internet would change our lives even more.

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