Second Story

Hi! Angel~ Thank you for your reply. I know about my problem of English writting. I will come a long way. I think you are good English teacher. So I need your help. Second story is my introducion. My name is Mandy Kim, I'm 31 years old. I was born in Busan, but I living in Seoul. I have a boy friend. and I have a dog. My job is java programmer. Sometimes I think my job is very difficult but After somedays, I must be having fun while doing my job. My hobbies are reading the webtoons and shopping. and I want to speak English well. so i can try. Thank you for reading despite my bad English. Sincerely. from Mandy.

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Hi Angel!

Thank you for your reply. I know about my problem in writing English. I will come a long way. I think you are a good English teacher, so I need your help. My second composition is about my self-introduction. My name is Mandy Kim. I'm 31 years old. I was born in Busan, but I live in Seoul. I have a boyfriend and I have a dog. My job is a java programmer. Sometimes, I think my job is very difficult, but I think I must have fun with my job. My hobbies are reading the webtoons and shopping. I want to speak English well, so I am trying really hard . Thank you for reading despite of my bad English.

Sincerely Yours,
Mandy

Note:
Red - punctuations and capitalization
Blue - spelling and verb tenses
Yellow - grammar lapses
Green - prepositions
Pink - word usage

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Dear Ms. Mandy,

Thank you again for sending another composition. As I read it, I have noticed some lapses. I want you to review them. And just like the other time, I want you to be careful with your punctuations and capitalization since this is a composition. I am glad that you are always trying your best. Learning English takes some practices and patient. Just keep on working with your sentences. I know you can do better in time. Study well.

Teacher Angel