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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 12. 14 조회 13910

Please check my sentences gramatically (12.9 - 2)

작성자: 1102047346 담당 튜터: Kendra1
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
I will not go back home early today because I have work stuff for me to finish.
I have a duty to finish it by myself.
I can't guarantee exact time to finish my work.
Some people mind their bosses.
If bosses don't finish work, they can't go back home.

Some koreans dream to go go other countries like Europe or US.
Most of them can't dream come true, because they have a fense of language.
Even they have to give up their possession such as house, friends, family and so on.
They must leave Korea without family, friends etc.

I heard that Canada is not competitive compared to Korea.
I hope to live more free than Korea.

I think if I'm not good at my work in my current job, even though I change my position like going other countries,unfortunately the result wouldn't be different.
That's why I have to do my best in my current position although someday,I will run away from my routine life.
The most important thing is my mind that I think about my current position.
튜터 교정 답변

I will not go back home early today because I have work to finish. I have a duty to finish it by myself. I can't guarantee the exact time when I will finish work. Some people listen to their boss if the boss don't finish work, they can't go home. Some Koreans dream to go go other countries like Europe or the US. Most of them can't make their dream come true because they lack a bit in the English language. Even they have to give up their possessions such as their house, friends, family and so on. They would leave Korea without their family, friends etc. I heard that Canada is not competitive compared to Korea. I hope to live more freely in Korea. I think if I'm not that good in my current job, even if I change my position like going to other countries, unfortunately the result wouldn't be different. That's why I have to do my best in my current position so, I could run away from my routine life one day. The most important thing in my mind that I'm thinking about is my current position.

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