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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 12. 16 조회 13143

ostracize

작성자: pos581121 담당 튜터: Amanda2
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Eventhough I havn't had an experience of ostracization before, I can imagin how it would be frustrated and depressing. Not only that but other problem would be others would also feel worry that one day they could be the one from there society. Generally speaking, if you have common sence of humor and don't have abnormal thought, it is not likely for you to be the one.
However, what I like to say is everybody has weak point, If we admit the fact, we shouldn't ostracize someone. It would brake your team power and also it couldn't give any advantage to everybody.
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Eventhough I haven't had an experience of ostracization before, I can imagine how it could be frustrating and depressing. Not only that but other problems that would also make people worry that one day they could be the one from there society. Generally speaking, if you have common sense, it is not likely for you to be one. However, what I like to say is everybody have weak points, If we admit the fact, we shouldn't ostracize someone. It would break your team power and also it couldn't give any advantage to everybody.

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