Thanatonautes
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Thanatonautes/ Bernard
As time goes by, life makes bigger pressure to me. When I was kid, I just needed to think what to play and every small thing made me smile. However, when I look at myself, as an adult, everything makes me anxious. I wish I could abate all fear surrouding me, but even worse it is getting bigger. [Relationship]:I lost many of my close friends who used to play with me when we were kids. Nowadays, it is very difficult just finging trustable person who can talk as freely. [Money]:I definitely don't want to be slave of it. However at the same time,I also need to think about future life, There are two kids I need to feed, house, car , managing money so that I need to try to have enough money that I can spend until I go away.
Sometimes I want to go back in the past when I can make smile everything. As respect of reality, since there are more than 30 years left in my life, I need to be more positive and try to enjoy the moment that I have.
As time goes by, life makes bigger pressure to me. When I was kid, I just needed to think what to play and every small thing made me smile. However, when I look at myself, as an adult, everything makes me anxious. I wish I could abate all fear surrouding me, but even worse it is getting bigger. [Relationship]:I lost many of my close friends who used to play with me when we were kids. Nowadays, it is very difficult just finging trustable person who can talk as freely. [Money]:I definitely don't want to be slave of it. However at the same time,I also need to think about future life, There are two kids I need to feed, house, car , managing money so that I need to try to have enough money that I can spend until I go away.
Sometimes I want to go back in the past when I can make smile everything. As respect of reality, since there are more than 30 years left in my life, I need to be more positive and try to enjoy the moment that I have.
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