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공개 첨삭 완료 2015. 12. 22 조회 12966

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작성자: pos442393 담당 튜터: Chase
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To produce a paper, we need to 10 liter water and occer co2 gas about 3 grams.
Do you know this statement?
so, In order to preserve the nature and portect a privacy, Please change a recept online
such as e-mail, MMS and smart application.
and then we will give benefits as discount bonus.
튜터 교정 답변

To produce a paper, we need to 10 liter water and occer co2 gas about 3 grams. Do you know this statement? so, In order to preserve the nature and portect a privacy, Please change a recept online such as e-mail, MMS and smart application. and then we will give benefits as discount bonus.

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To produce paper, we need 10 liters of  water and occur about 3 grams of co2 . Do you know about this? So, In order to preserve the nature and portect its privacy, please use online receipt such as e-mail, MMS and smart application instead of a receipt made of paper and then we will give benefits such as discounts

 

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