Resume
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
OBJECTIVE GOAL
To work for an Internet
Based firm in a IT developer.
Ideal position would provide exposure to various business planning process model to develop successful IT solution project in different market segments.
I am looking to trade a creative mind and valuable business planning capabilities
ACCOMPLISHMENTS
Developed a business planning process model for Samsung.
Various experience by contracting process skill for clients
To work for an Internet
Based firm in a IT developer.
Ideal position would provide exposure to various business planning process model to develop successful IT solution project in different market segments.
I am looking to trade a creative mind and valuable business planning capabilities
ACCOMPLISHMENTS
Developed a business planning process model for Samsung.
Various experience by contracting process skill for clients
튜터 교정 답변
OBJECTIVE GOAL:
To work for an Internet Based firm as an IT developer. Ideal position would provide exposure to various business planning process model; develop successful IT solution project in different market segments. I am looking to trade a creative mind and valuable business planning capabilities ACCOMPLISHMENTS Developed a business planning process model for Samsung. Various experience by contracting process skill for clients
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