16.01.07. Raise Pet
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Let me tell you about My Pet.
Right now, I am raising some guppys. There are around 30 guppys in my small fish bowl.
3 years ago, My daughter brougt a guppy from her kindergarten. I thought a guppy was seems to be so lonely. So I went the fish market which is aquarium, and I bought a guppy in additional. Nowdays, these guppys are to be 30. Guppy didn't have hair and didn't come up allergy. So my wife agreed to raise them.
Guppy is gorgeous and don't make noisy and don't come up allergy as well as to raise easy. I don't feel tired when I wash a fish bowl. Because they are a part of my family.
Right now, I am raising some guppys. There are around 30 guppys in my small fish bowl.
3 years ago, My daughter brougt a guppy from her kindergarten. I thought a guppy was seems to be so lonely. So I went the fish market which is aquarium, and I bought a guppy in additional. Nowdays, these guppys are to be 30. Guppy didn't have hair and didn't come up allergy. So my wife agreed to raise them.
Guppy is gorgeous and don't make noisy and don't come up allergy as well as to raise easy. I don't feel tired when I wash a fish bowl. Because they are a part of my family.
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