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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 04. 29 조회 12871

Korea's ancient constructions and building

작성자: pos600333 담당 튜터: Jasmine1
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China is famous for its' long history and very large size of historic constructions.
Korean history has been long similarly to the Chinese history, but our constructions are smaller than the Chinese.
I think that the reason is related to the size of territory and the concept of the constructions.

Our land is smaller than china. So, our constructions is focusing more on the delication than the size.
Additionally, our ancestors considered about the burden of the people when making large size of palaces.
At the result, our constructions are small but, charming and sensuous.
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China is famous for its long history and very large size of historic constructions. Korean history has long been long similarly to the Chinese history, but our constructions are smaller than the Chinese. I think that the reason is related to the size of territory and the concept of the constructions. Our land is smaller than china. So, our constructions is focusing more on the delication than the size. Additionally, our ancestors considered about the burden of the people when making large size of palaces. As the a result, our constructions are small but, charming and sensuous.

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1) If you say something is large, we assume it's the size. You don't have to specify that
2) "consider" doesn't take a preposition
3) its is possessive without an apostrophe

I didn't know any of this previously. It was an interesting read for me! Thanks for sharing! I didn't consider the size of Korea related to their buildings. All palaces look big to me since America doesn't have them.

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