Domestic traveling
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Let me tell you about My domestic traveling. A couple years ago, my mother and my family traveled to Oedo island which is in the southern Korea. This travel was first time with my mother.
Oedo was really famous island in the Korea. There are a lot of nice scenery. We admired various flowers in the garden. And there is nice fountain in the middel of island. Also we took a picture togather in front of fountain. And we got on a cruis ship for watching various island. I first exprienced to get cruis ship.
At that time I spent much happy time with my family. It was heaven. I still enjoy the pictures I took when I was there.
Oedo was really famous island in the Korea. There are a lot of nice scenery. We admired various flowers in the garden. And there is nice fountain in the middel of island. Also we took a picture togather in front of fountain. And we got on a cruis ship for watching various island. I first exprienced to get cruis ship.
At that time I spent much happy time with my family. It was heaven. I still enjoy the pictures I took when I was there.
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