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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 01. 13 조회 13763

Business Sense

작성자: pos452923 담당 튜터: Dessa1
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I think Business Sense is most important to be successful leader.
i have several reasons to support my opinion. first, according to business mazine,
most sucessful ceo tend to have Business Sense, for example, steve job is famous for
Business Sense. so he could attract customer and invester. also he will get promoted.
that's why Business Sense is most important to be successful leader.
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I think Business Sense is most important to be successful leader.

I think business sense is  the most important thing to have to be a successful leader.

i have several reasons to support my opinion.

I have several reasons to support my opinion.

first, according to business mazine, most sucessful ceo tend to have Business Sense, for example,  Steve Job is famous for Business Sense. so he could attract customer and invester.

First, according to a business magazine, most successful CEOs tend to have business sense, for example, Steve Jobs was famous for having business sense,
so he could attract customers and investors.
 

also he will get promoted.

Also, he got promoted.

that's why Business Sense is most important to be successful leader.

This is why business sense is the most important thing to have to be a successful leader.
 

 

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