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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 01. 14 조회 12842

Traveling abroad.

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As you might know, I often go for a business trip and traveling abroad.
At that time, I take a lot of things when I go to abroad. Such as passport, some medicions and clothes.

First, passport is really importent. I have to carry everywhere. When I get a flight and to pass imegration checking, if I always have to possess, I can do it.
Second, I have an allergy to dust. So I make sure to bring some medicions.
Finaly, I take some clothes to change. I hard do the landray in the abroad. Thus I always bring enough clothes.

Whitout them, I won't be able to enjoy my traveling abroad.
튜터 교정 답변

As you might know, I often go for a business trip and traveling abroad. At that time, I take a lot of things when I go abroad such as passport, medicine and clothes. First, passport is very important. I have to carry it everywhere. When I get a flight and to pass for immigration checking. Second, I have an allergy to dust. So I make sure to bring some medicine. Finally, I bring some clothes to change. It's hard for me to do the laundry abroad. Thus, I always bring enough clothes. Without them, I won't be able to enjoy my travel.

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