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We had incessant snow last night

작성자: pos581121 담당 튜터: Amanda2
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It is not common to see snow where I live. If you see it more than 5 times a yaer, it would be lucky for you. However, we had snow last night. Interestingly it was snowing with bule sky.
You might have the feeling that makes you more emotionally than before especially when it is snowing. When I was young it happen all the time and somtimes it makes me more strong the way I express my feeling to somebody. One statisic shows that if you say I love you to somebody when it is snowing, the percentage of success reachs up to 90%. I wanted to be one of lucky guy, however, I had bad memory. It was snowing very much, the mood was romantic, everything looked just as perpact as I pexpected. Would you like to know last story? I blamed the snow which made me sorrow and depress because a girl who I liked did not accept my asking. There is always an exception. That is what I learned.
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It is not common to see snow where I live. If you see it more than 5 times a year, you'd be lucky. However, we had snow last night. Interestingly it was snowing with a clear sky. You might become emotional and have feelings when you see something like this. When I was young it happened all the time and sometimes it makes me express my feelings more intensely. One statistic shows that if you say I love you to somebody when it is snowing, the percentage of success reaches 90%, or higher. I wanted to be one of the lucky guys, however, I have a bad memory. It was snowing very much, the mood was romantic, everything looked just as I expected. Would you like to know last story? I blamed the snow which made me sad and depressed, because a girl who I liked did not accept my proposal. There is always an exception. That is what I learned.

This is an amazing story Sunny! Keep up the hard work! 

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