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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 01. 19 조회 12614

The bank in my country

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Let me tell you about the Bank in my country. There are a lot of bank in my country. Woori bank, Sinhan bank, Kookmin bank and so on. Based on bank of business opening is at 9:00 am and closing is at 4:00 pm. My favorite bank is Woori bank. It's very famous bank in my country. Woori bank is located in really near my office. I usually go to the bank to exchange dollars and to loan for buying my house. The bank is really small and cozy. There are five taller and a guard in the bank. Otherwise, there are some teas and coffices on the table for customer, so I can enjoy drinkng a cup of coffiee while I wait for my turn.
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Let me tell you about banks in my country. There are a lot of banks in my country. Woori bank, Sinhan bank, Kookmin bank and so on. Banks here usually open at 9:00 am and close at  4:00 pm. My favorite bank is Woori bank. It's very famous in my country. Woori bank is located near my office. I usually go to the bank to exchange dollars and to loan for buying my house. The bank is really small and cozy. There are five tellers and a guard in the bank. Otherwise, there are some teas and coffee on the table for customers, so I can enjoy drinking a cup of coffee while waiting for my turn.

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