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작성자: 87316 담당 튜터: Sheryl
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
As you might know. I am working for Samsung as system engineerer for 20 years. I love as much as in new technalogy. Such as IoT, autonomouse and android. So I need too much information about new technalogy. I everyday like to google so much. A month ago, I intended to make presentation about IoT and I could find both nice report and pretty good picture from some blogs. I've done succesfully my own presentation. I got a lot help on the blogs. Laterly, I started new project and I've knew new knowledge. So I posted my knowledge about ORACLE DB on my own blos. Some guests visited my own blog. I falt proude a lot.
튜터 교정 답변

As you might know. I am working for Samsung as a system engineer for 20 years. I really love new technologies such as IoT, autonomouse and android. So I need a lot of information about new technology. I like to google so much everyday. A month ago, I intended to make a presentation about IoT and I could find both nice report and pretty good pictures from some blogs. I've finished my own presentation successfully. I got a lot of help on the blogs. Later, I started a new project and I've learned new knowledge. So I posted my knowledge about ORACLE DB on my own blog. Some guests visited my own blog. I feel very proud of myself.

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