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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 02. 03 조회 12772

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작성자: 87316 담당 튜터: Sheryl
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I live in Suwon city which is westen in Seoul in Korea. I moved from Busan to Suwon for my job for 10 years ago. Also I love city life. People say that there are too many people and cars. And there are so many things you can see old castles and so many apartments. I think Suwon is dynamic city. It is full of energy and active day and night. Suwon is known for HwaSung. It's designated as a UNESCO World Heritagesite. Suwon is large city among the city in korea. And Suwon's population is over a million. For the last ten years, Suwon has been a lot change. Such as population has been increased a lot and more active and a lot public transportion. Although I lived for 10 years. I love Suwon and I feel proud of Suwon.
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I live in Suwon City which is in the western part of  Seoul. I moved from Busan to Suwon for my job 10 years ago. I love city life. People say that there are too many people and cars. And there are so many things you can see like old castles and so many apartments. I think Suwon is a dynamic city. It is full of energy and active day and night. Suwon is known for HwaSung. It's designated as a UNESCO World Heritage site. Suwon is the largest city in Korea. And its population is over a million. For the last ten years, Suwon has a lot of changes such as the population increased a lot and became more active and there are a lot of public transportations. I lived there for 10 years. I love Suwon and I feel proud of Suwon.

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