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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 02. 04 조회 13537

Slef Introduction

작성자: 1102308003 담당 튜터: Sheryl
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
Hi, My name is SOYOUNG-LEE, I am 27 years old. I am born Ui-wang which is very small town.I have lived in Ui-wang, since i was born.
My family is 5 people. My parents, 2 siblings and Me.My father have a company working about transportation business. Thanks to my father, i can study and grow up without hardness.
My mother is housewife. I really Love mom's cook.
Because i am staying at my company's dormitory, sometimes i miss my mom's cook.
all of my siblings move out like me.
We are all grow up, so we think, we can stay without our parents.
Usually, In Korea, even after 30 years old, they stay with their parents.
But for us, We think we need to move out to give more time to enjoy their life to out parents.
튜터 교정 답변

Hi, my name is SOYOUNG-LEE. I am 27 years old. I was born in Ui-wang which is a very small town. I have lived in Ui-wang since I was born. My family consists of 5 people, my parents, 2 siblings and me. My father has a transportation business. Thanks to my father, I can study and grow up without hardship. My mother is a housewife. I really love my mom's cooking. I'm currently staying in my company's dormitory, sometimes I miss my mom's cooking. All of my siblings moved out like me. We are all grown up, so we think, we can live on our own without our parents. Usually, in Korea, even at the age of 30, they stay with their parents. But for us, we think we need to move out to give our parents more time to enjoy their lives.

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