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공개 첨삭 완료 2014. 05. 02 조회 13518

Reducing Nuclear power plant Policy

작성자: pos600333 담당 튜터: Jasmine1
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After the accident of Japan Hukushima nuclear power, many countries tried to expand the alternative power plants. Generation of electricity using wind, solar heat or tide was promoted by the government. However, the performance and profitability of them was not good.

That is, nuclear power plant is the best and realistic way to generate electricity economically. Of course, it has the problem in the environmental point and security. So, we should focus on how to operate the nuclear power plant safely, and how to deal the nuclear waste.
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After the accident of Japan Hukushima, Japan nuclear power accident, many countries tried to expand the alternative power plants. Generation of electricity using wind, solar heat or tides (pl) was promoted by the government. However, the performance and profitability of them was were not good. That is, nuclear power plant is the best and most realistic way to generate electricity economically. Of course, it has environmental and security problems  the problem in the environmental point and security. So, we should focus on how to operate the nuclear power plant safely, and how to deal with the nuclear waste.

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So we have 2 ways to make possessives in English.

1) My father's car
2) The car of my father

You tend to use the 2nd one whereas native speakers more often use the 1st as it's shorter and easier for us. Yours aren't wrong, but it's more difficult to construct. That's what went wrong in your first sentence. It was too many words to organize smoothly, so there were some misplaces words. Also, the city name is always first.

I live in Wilmington, North Carolina. I live in Busan, Korea. I studied in Paris, France.

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