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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 02. 04 조회 12110

City Life 2

작성자: 87316 담당 튜터: Sheryl
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People in the city enjoy the culture and outdoor activity with family on the weekends. There are plenty of galleries, museums, places and parks. You can see movies or musicals. Suwon has a amazingly fastival named Suwon Hwaseong Cultual Fastival. These days, it is being held at Hwaseong castle. There are a lot events. Such as various eating, performances and some parades. It's super famous in my country. Many people take a picture with their family infront of nice place and spend happy time. Going to the movies is the best way to escape from the bustling city life. Comfortabe seats, sweet popcon and good movies take people's mind off stress even for a monent. In other word, people in the city try to escape from city life on the weekends.
튜터 교정 답변

People in our city enjoy the culture and outdoor activities with families on weekends. There are plenty of galleries, museums, places and parks. You can see movies or musicals. Suwon has an amazing festival named Suwon Hwaseong Cultural Festival. On these days, it is held at Hwaseong castle. There are a lot of events such as various eating, performances and some parades. It's very famous in my country. Many people take a picture with their family in front of the nice palace and spend happy times. Going to the movies is the best way to escape from the bustling city life. Comfortable seats, sweet popcorn and good movies take people's mind off stress even for a moment. In other word, people in the city try to escape from city life on the weekends.

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