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1. Introduction

작성자: 1101091787 담당 튜터: JJ
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
학생 제출 원문
My name is Jung! Nice to mee you! My purpose for this class is to get a Fisr grade OPIC test!
It's up to you! Please I ask you well in the future! ^^
Below is my introduction!

My name is Jung. I am thiry one years old and I am an engineer. I majored in engineering in college, and I have been working at SAMSUNG SDS for about two and a half year now. I am in chagr of
maintaing and adjusting cost estimation system. I like what i do and I think I am pretty lucky for that. I live by myself in Seoul. I move out a year ago becasue of the long and tiring commute to wirk. I feel lonely sometimes but it is really nice to have time for myself when I am tired from work. In my free time, I try ro visit my parents every other week. I like spending time with my family because it relieves stress. I usually hang out with my friends or my family during the weekend. My family and friends are the most important thing in my life.

Next tuesday! I want to talk about my "Company product"

Thanks
튜터 교정 답변

CORRECTION:

1.Nice to mee you!

> Nice to meet (spelling) you!

2. My purpose for this class is to get a Fisr grade OPIC test!

> My purpose in studying is to get a high score in OPIC test!

3. Please I ask you well in the future!

> Please help me. I might ask you many questions in the future!

4. I am thiry one years old and I am an engineer.

> I am thirty (spelling) one years old and I am an Enginner (capital letter "E").

5.  ...for about two and a half year now

>  ...for about two and a half years (put "s") now.

6. I am in chagr of maintaing and adjusting cost estimation system.

> I am in charge of maintaining (spelling)  and adjusting cost estimation system.

7.  I like what i do and I think I am pretty lucky for that.

> I like what I (capital letter) do and I think I am pretty lucky for that.

8. I live by myself in Seoul. (correct)

> I live alone in Seoul. (you can also use)

9. I move out a year ago becasue of the long and tiring commute to wirk.

> I moved (past tense) out a year ago because (spelling) of the tiring and long travel  going to work (spelling).

10. Next tuesday! I want to talk about my "Company product"

> Next Tuesday, (capital letter "T" and use comma instead of exclamation point) I want to talk about my "company product". (small letter "c")

 

 

Thank you Jung for showing interest in studying English. I am happy that you are eager to learn the language. Rest assured that I will try my best to help you improve your skill. Anyway, I made some coorrections for you above. Please try to study the corrections. Have a nice weekend!!! smiley

 

Teacher Jj

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