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answes for part6 #7

작성자: pos606652 담당 튜터: Richard1
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I agree that using the latest technology brings success to a company. Here are some reasons to support the idea.
First of all, the latest technology can increase the productivity of the company. Employees can do their jobs faster and easily with the technology.
Secondly, using latest technologies can optimize a system and a process in the company. The company can reduce costs by the optimization and make a lot of profit.
For those reasons, companies should apply the latest technology to their work places.
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I agree that using the latest technology brings success to a company. Here are some reasons to support the idea.
First of all, the latest technology can increase the productivity of the company. Employees can do their jobs faster and easily with the technology.
Secondly, using the (You should use the definite article because "latest" means you are referring to a specific group) latest technologies can optimize a system and a process in the company. The company can reduce costs by the optimization and make a lot of profit.
For those reasons, companies should apply the latest technology to their work places.

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