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answer for part6 #13

작성자: pos606652 담당 튜터: Richard1
수강생 원문과 튜터 교정 (Before & After)
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I prefer to get advice from my friends rather than anyone else when I look for a job. Here are some reasons to support the idea.
First of all, most of time I spend time with my friends, so they can understand my situation better than anyone else can and I can get practical advice from them.
Secondly, I have many friends who have many job experiences or are working in good companies, so they have practical information about a job market. And they are able to introduce a good position where I can work.
For those reason, I ask for advice from my friends when I look for a job.
튜터 교정 답변

I prefer to get advice from my friends rather than anyone else when I look for a job. Here are some reasons to support the idea.
First of all, most of the time ("most of" should always be used with a determiner after it) I spend time with my friends, so they can understand my situation better than anyone else can and I can get practical advice from them.
Secondly, I have many friends who have many a lot of job experiences or are working in good companies, so they have practical information about a job market. And they are able to introduce a good position where I can work.
For those reason, I ask for advice from my friends when I look for a job.

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