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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 02. 22 조회 13942

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작성자: 87316 담당 튜터: Sheryl
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Hello, is this Ava, it's David. You know what? My favorite singer Sam Smith is coming to Korea next week. Can you believe this? He is having a concert next Satuerday at Olympic Park Stadium in Seoul. I was wondering if you wanted to come with me. He is pretty famous singer in the world as well as awosome. As you know, he is a guy. Howevery he has amazing voice. Also his song is pretty good. I like to listen to the his song called "Let me down". The tickets are a litte bit expensive but it will be worth the money. If you go with me, I will put the bill and I will pick you up in froint of your house. The concert definatly will be great. I expect to go the concert with you. I really don't want to miss the concet. It's once-in-a-life-time opportunity. Please don't make me go there alone. Will you come?
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Hello, is this Ava? It's David. You know what? My favorite singer, Sam Smith, is coming to Korea next week. Can you believe that? He is having a concert next Saturday at Olympic Park Stadium in Seoul. I was wondering if you want to come with me. He is a pretty, famous singer in the world as well as awesome. As you know, he is a guy. However, he has an amazing voice. Also, his songs are pretty good. I like to listen to his song called "Let me down". The tickets are a litte bit expensive but they will worth the money. If you go with me, I will put the bill and I will pick you up in front of your house. The concert will definitely be great. I expect to go to the concert with you. I really don't want to miss the concert. It's a once-in-a-lifetime opportunity. Please don't make me go there alone. Will you come?

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