Greetings

My name is K.J.Yoo. I'm 49 years old.
I live in Dongtan, near by Suwon.

- I live in Dongtan, nearby Suwon.
There are 5 members in my family, my wife, 2 daughters, 1 son and myself.

My wife is a teacher in elementary school. Especially she is charge in health of students.

-My wife is a teacher in elementary school. She is especially in-charge of the health of the students.
Normally, she is called as a nurse-teacher in school.

My elder daughter is 21 years old. She is early looking forward to entering the University, but she failed for last 2 years.

- My elder daughter is 21 years old. She is currently looking forward to entering the University, but she failed for the last 2 years.
She has a talent in painting, so she wants to be a painter, especially a Western-style painter.
Anyway, she will challange to go to the University once more in this year.

-Anyway, she will try to go to the University once more this year.

My youger daughter is 19 years old. she is 3rd grade in high school.

-My younger daughter is 19 years old. She is in his 3rd year in high school.
She is also studying hard to pass(get through) an entrance examination for University what she wants to go.

-She is also studying hard to pass(get through) the entrance examination for the university where she wants to go to. 
She is so smart that it is possible that she will get a good result in the entrance exam. 

My son is 11 years old. He is 4th grade in elementray school.
-My son is 11 years old. He is in his 4th grade in elementray school.

He likes to play the sports. Especially, he very likes baseball, he is big fan of Hanhwa Eagle that is Korea Pro Baseball team.
He likes to play sports. He especially likes baseball, he is a big fan of Hanhwa Eagle which is a Korean Pro Baseball team.

I work for Samsung Display. I'm in charge of the yield in massproduction.

- I work for Samsung Display. I'm in charge of the yield in mass production.
My office is located in Asan, near by Chunan. So I have to commute for 1-hour.

-My office is located in Asan, nearby Chunan. So I have to commute for 1-hour (an hour).
It makes me be tired everyday.

-It makes me (feel)  tired everyday.
But I take pride in my work.

We get along well with our family. We hang out a lot together, whenever we have free time.

- We get along well. We hang out a lot together, whenever we have free time.
I hope our family's wish are fullfilled(realized) in this year.

-I hope our family's wish are fullfilled(realized) this year.
If there are no futher questions, I wish I'd like to warp up the introduce myself.

- If there are no futher questions, I'd like to wrap up the introduction of myself. 
Thank you.

ANSWER / REPLY:

ANSWER:

Hi K.J. Yoo! That was a really good introduction of yourself including your family. It's really nice of you to take time and send me a message here. 

Based on what I've read, you are really proud of your family. I hope that your children will be able to achieve their dreams. 

I hope we'll have a really good time talking and learning in our class. Should you have any suggestions for it, just say so. 

Thank you!

Regards, 

Diane