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공개 첨삭 완료 2016. 03. 04 조회 11768

Promotion

작성자: kjyoo108 담당 튜터: Diane
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Recently, our company announced promotions. The promotion means to go higher position such as from general manager to manager something like that. This announcement makes the one who get a promotion happy and makes others discourage. We congratulated them and consoled as well respectively. And by tradition, we held the company dinner to celebrate winner and console losers. I give my junior colleage who didn't get promotion even three thims including this year to console and drink together.
The promotion is related to many things like salary, rights and power so on. Therefore it seems many people want to be a promotion.
In my case, It will come to a chance for promotion to me.
I want to get a promotion next year.
To be like that, It seems I must study English very hard.^^
튜터 교정 답변

Recently, our company announced some promotions. Promotion means to be given a higher position such as from general manager to manager something like that. This announcement makes the one who get a promotion happy and discourage others. We congratulated them and consoled as well respectively. And by tradition, we held the company dinner to celebrate my co-workers who had been promoted. I gave my junior colleague three thims including this year to console and drink together because he didn't get any promotions.
The promotion is related to many things like salary, rights and power so on. Therefore, it seems many people wants to be promoted.
In my case, I will also have my chance to get promoted.
I want to get a promotion next year.
To be like that, It seems I must study English very hard.^^

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